How It Should Have Ended: Rapunzel — a guest post by J.C. Nelson

This guest post is by J.C. Nelson, whose book, Free Agent, came out on 29 July. Happy book birthday, JC!

In this edition of “HISHE: Fairy Tales,” we take a look at the familiar tale “Rapunzel” and try to work out how it would have gone if anyone had a lick of sense. Rapunzel was a fairly obscure fairy tale until it got Disney-fied, but we’ll work from the original for this HISHE.

In the original, Rapunzel, named for a leafy green her mother coveted, lets her hair down for her adopted mother. And the Prince, he hears Rapunzel’s voice, and starts a relationship with her. I don’t mean one visit. I mean lots and lots of visits.

Rapunzel and the Prince develop a sort of rapport, by which I mean Rapunzel gets pregnant. In some versions Rapunzel agrees to be his wife, in other versions—we’re just going to stick with the ones where she agrees. Either way, one day she complains about how her dress is getting tight, because she’s getting a bit of a baby bump. And right there, the witch knows something is up. I mean, no matter how she does the math, their little tower for two has been seeing extra action.

Now, if the witch had even a lick of sense, she would have said “Silly me: I should have known that abstinence based birth control doesn’t work. Plus, I did sort of steal a young girl at the impressionable age of 12 and lock her away in a tower. So really, it’s my fault.”

But that isn’t what happens in the original. No, she cuts off Rapunzel’s hair, tosses Rapnunzel into the desert and lays waiting for the prince. When he climbs the tower, depending on who you believe, he either leaps out after finding the witch or she pushes him. Either way, he falls on thorns and is blinded.

Again, if any of them had a lick of common sense, none of this would have happened.

“Hey, Rapunzel, let down your hair. I brought those prenatal vitamins you were craving. Honey, I think the hair needs some brushing. And these bloody clots in it are not a nice touch.”

(In a deep, witchy voice) “Come up, my darling.”

“Uh, on second thought, I’m good here, thanks.” [Prince leaves.]

In the story, he wanders blindly, eventually finding his way to the desert, where it turns out Rapunzel gave birth to twins, a boy and a girl. Some variants have the blind prince living happily ever after blind, and some have Rapunzel’s tears healing him.

In all versions, he finds his way back to his Kingdom, where they live happily ever after.

But really, this ending is fundamentally broken, and here’s why:

  1. Rapunzel missed all formative interaction thanks to the witch. She’s socially damaged and likely incapable of living a normal life.
  2. Because she never developed normal relationships, you can pretty much bet she’s going to take to skulking in the highest tower, and growing her armpit hair until she can braid it with her nose hair and eyebrows to wear around.
  3. The witch was the only person Rapunzel got to interact with, so she likely has a serious case of Stockholm syndrome.

The way it should have ended is that the Prince hears Rapunzel’s voice. He reports it to the national hotline for missing and exploited princesses (they get more traffic than you’d think). The police investigate and call in special therapists who establish a safe, non-sexual relationship with Rapunzel. Eventually, Rapunzel is released to her parents, though she quickly moves into a treehouse, where she feels more comfortable. She shaves her hair bald and has violent panic attacks at the sight of anyone with more than an inch of hair, but with therapy, lives a long life.

The Prince marries one of the many reporters who come to interview him for his role in the case, and forms a charity, “Out of the Tower,” dedicated to helping victims of fairy tales. He lives and dies with 20/20 sight, and a wife who, while moderately vain, is capable of normal human affection.

The witch serves a life sentence in Mother Hubbard’s Maximum Security Shoe for her role.

Free Agent

When it comes to crafting happily-ever-afters, the Agency is the best in the land of Kingdom. The Fairy Godfather Grimm can solve any problem—from eliminating imps to finding prince charming—as long as you can pay the price…

Working for Grimm isn’t Marissa Locks’s dream job. But when your parents trade you to a Fairy Godfather for a miracle, you don’t have many career options. To pay off her parents’ debt and earn her freedom, Marissa must do whatever Grimm asks, no matter what fairy-tale fiasco she’s called on to deal with.

Setting up a second-rate princess with a first-class prince is just another day at the office. But when the matchmaking goes wrong, Marissa and Grimm find themselves in a bigger magical muddle than ever before. Not only has the prince gone missing, but the Fae are gearing up to attack Kingdom, and a new Fairy Godmother is sniffing around Grimm’s turf, threatening Marissa with the one thing she can’t resist: her heart’s wishes.

Now Marissa will have to take on Fairies, Fae, dragons, and princesses to save the realm—or give up any hope of ever getting her happy ending…

Excerpt: Chapter One

The New Year’s Eve countdown told me I had five minutes until the ball drop. That gave me six minutes until somebody got killed. I spotted the shoplifter in line at the theater and worked my way across the street, through the teeming crowd. She had no idea what she was wearing, which made her both stupid and dangerous. Stupid was dangerous enough by itself.

“Marissa, I might remind you of the time,” said a man’s voice. It came right out of the store window beside me, the dry voice with its not-quite-English accent. He watched me with critical eyes.

“I got it, Grimm.” I walked along the theater line, head down.

His image followed me, reflecting from the windows and even the brass banister knobs that held the velvet rope. “I’ll believe that when you actually do.”

Call it women’s intuition, or maybe the slippers she wore tipped her off, but the shoplifter turned and looked right at me. Our eyes met, and she knew why I was there, if not who I was. As the crowd surged forward, she ducked into the theater, disappearing into the throng.

“God Damsel-it.” I spat out the faint taste of soap. “Doesn’t count, not a real curse.”

“Watch your language, young lady. Only proper women live happily ever after. Now, go get those slippers back.” Grimm appeared in the ticket window, beckoning me on.

If I had enough Glitter to buy a happily ever after, I wouldn’t have spent all day chasing a thief. There were easier ways to make a living, and definitely safer ways.

I breathed in the warm lobby air, laced with enough butter, fat, and salt to make me gain a couple of pounds just from walking through.

The ticket man watched me as I approached, jiggling my leg. “I’ve got to go. Could you save my spot in line?”

He rolled his eyes, the apex of teenage angst, and motioned me past. I’d been to my fair share of balls and knew where I’d go if I had a pair of shoes that were killing my feet. I headed straight to the bathroom. Nobody in the prep area, but I listened. There, soft sobbing, and the click of high heels on ceramic.

“The slippers won’t come off like that.” I hoped I wasn’t talking to a Grandma, but the sobbing cut off.

Grimm coalesced into the mirrored wall, his white hair framing the bald spot on his head. He looked at me over horn-rimmed glasses that masked eyebrows like a yeti’s. “Marissa, two minutes.”

If I’d had something handy, I’d have thrown it at the mirror. In the name of not having a magical disaster, I decided to commit the cardinal sin of the ladies room. I tried the stall door. As my hand touched it, the door burst open, hitting me in the face. Pain made the world flash white. I put my hand to my nose and felt the blood as she dashed out of the restroom. Grimm told me the shoes were enchanted, but the fact that she could run in three-inch heels meant serious magic. Now I knew I had the right girl. In the lobby, the fire alarms wailed as I came out of the bathroom, and I caught a glimpse of her running out. I charged after her, through the fire exit and into the alley.

I wasn’t afraid of your average dark alley. I had standard Agency-issue spells in my coat and a nine millimeter in my purse for dealing with the less dangerous pests, but even I knew you have to be careful with an upset woman.

She pulled at her feet and limped down the alley. “I’m not giving them back.”

No way was she going to outrun me. Tennis shoes might not be the height of fashion, but I wore them for their practicality. I slipped a bag out of my pocket. “This will let me take them off. You can’t remove them because you stole them.”

She stumbled, then slumped against the wall, her feet out in front of her. Passing taillights made the glass slippers glisten, moving and shifting, like something alive. That made sense, since Grimm said they were. The glass filled with red, like she’d cut her toe. The bloodstain spread up the sides of the glass and she began to gurgle and cry.

I pulled out my pocket compact. “Grimm, I might have a problem.”

“Tell me you have them.”

“Just about.”

“Get out of there, Marissa. She’s not going to turn into a pumpkin.” His voice was firm and commanding. I’d never been the type to listen to firm or commanding. See, there was this thing about magic slippers. Use them with permission, and at midnight the whole deal expired. Steal them from a custom boutique on Fifth, and at midnight turning into a vegetable was the least of your worries.

She curled into a ball, kicking, growling, and making noises I’d never heard outside of the labor and delivery room. Running through the theater was out; heading back in there would introduce a whole load of teens to a different kind of monster than the movie ones. The loading bays down at the end of the alley didn’t look too promising, and now Princess PMS rose to her feet. The bloodred stains covered her from head to toe. Shadows covered her face, but where the orange wash of the street lights hit her she looked maroon.

“You want to let me help you?” I asked. The growling noise she made ruled out diplomacy. “Okay, we do it my way.”

She leaped at me. I’d mastered seven different forms of self-defense and I wore all four of the major protection charms, but one thing was constant: Whether my assailant was a drug addict or a bridge troll, pepper spray would leave them blind. So I ducked out of the way and gave her a dash of the scent I was sampling that day. It hit her like a brick, leaving her clawing at her eyes. I realized as she stumbled past that her nails were now at least three inches long and razor sharp.

She started sniffing the air, then like a dog, she ran straight into me, knocking me back to the Dumpster. Dumpsters hurt. I caught her arm before she could give me surprise plastic surgery and slammed her into the ground, pinning her underneath me.

That should have ended it, but she rolled over, throwing me to the side, and I barely stepped out of the way of those nails. She kicked at me and I caught her foot.

“Gotcha,” I said, rubbing the shoes with the bag. Grimm said the bag was made of genuine werewolf fur, but whatever it was, the effect was immediate. She thrashed and choked and kicked and I held on tight until she went limp. The slippers came off in my hand without a fight.

They glimmered under the streetlight, and for a moment I saw an image form in them: Me, walking down the street in them. No Agency bracelet on my wrist, a bag from shopping in my hand. I could be free, if only I put them on.

“Marissa,” said Grimm, speaking from the reflection in the shoes, “put them in the bag.”

I did, and the fantasy blew away like dry leaves down the sidewalk. My back hurt where I’d hit the Dumpster. My arm throbbed where she’d grabbed me, and my cheek had that hot feeling that said somewhere in her thrashing, she’d managed to nail me with a foot.

“I’m going home,” I said to my compact mirror. “What do you want me to do with her?”

“Leave her for the police. They’ll be there shortly. Evangeline needs your assistance on the Upper East Side, and there’s the matter of a troll.”

“I’m going home.” I knew full well he’d heard me the first time.

“I’ve got work for you, Marissa, and if you are ever to get your own ever after—”

“The only after I’m interested in right now is after a bottle of wine and after a long night’s sleep. I’ll see you when I’m ready for work.”

“Marissa, you need to ask yourself what you want more: A night’s sleep, or another job.”

I wiped a trace of blood off my lip, took a look at my bruises in the compact. Everything about me ached and the cold seeped out of the shadows into my bones. I put my hand on the bracelet and made my decision. “Tell Evangeline I’m on my way.” Nights like this made me wish I’d never gotten started in this business.

About JC

A Texas transplant to the Pacific Northwest, JC Nelson lives with a family and a flock of chickens near rainy Seattle.

Media Links for JC Nelson


Face book:



Free Agent on Goodreads

 Buy Free Agent Now


Barnes & Noble:

2 Comments on “How It Should Have Ended: Rapunzel — a guest post by J.C. Nelson”

  1. football says:

    It will truly allow you to access to the most up to the minute scores of all playing teams.
    It is Tennessee’s Rocky Top, Florida’s Old Ball Coach, and of course the Gator Chomp and
    the mighty Tim Tebow. During matches rush for football tickets goes beyond any margin, and it becomes tough for the
    organisers to handle that.

  2. […] series. If you want to see the equally gorgeous cover of book one, JC guest posted on my blog last month. (Also, the guest post is awesome too. Check it […]

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in: Logo

You are commenting using your account. Log Out /  Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out /  Change )

Connecting to %s